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Uprising (eBook)

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Uprising
Uprising eBook Cover, written by William Drew
Uprising eBook Cover,
written by William Drew
Author(s) William Drew
Series Hell's Earth
Publisher Amazon Digital Services
Publication date July 4, 2015
Media type eBook
Length 62 Pages
ASIN B0110DLCES

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Uprising is an eBook written by William Drew. It is the first work in the Hell's Earth series by this author. In this work the character Trina is transformed into a Succubus taking the name Draonai.


Overview

  • Title: Uprising
  • Author: William Drew
  • Published By: Amazon Digital Services
  • Length: 62 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B0110DLCES
  • Publishing Date: July 4, 2015


Other Works in this Series on SuccuWiki


Plot Summary

Trina was an archeologist who always looked to the future to uncover history. Her passion and drive made her the most sought after person in her field for guidance and expertise. Her most recent find was located in the heart of Death Valley. She was accompanied by Her boss, Ruben who was an eccentric billionaire and was one of the board members for the Smithsonian. However he was only interested in his lust for power and control. Trina also worked alongside Vincent who has been her apprentice and wanted nothing more than to win her love. Together, they had found a stone gate hidden under the hot desert sand for a millenia. As the gate was opened their lives and the fate of the world fell to the most ominous figure only read and taught about in the bible and the power that he would unleash on Earth was just the beginning.


Book Review

The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on November 1, 2016


Trina finds herself caught between a rock and a hard place. Plans lead to a disaster, Trina is not who she once was, and the world isn’t as well. Losses mount, the world is in flames and in the end, the fate of the world might be in the hands of a single succubus.

The work is very difficult to read for several reasons, not the least of which is that there isn’t a moment’s pause in the work. The work moves at a breakneck clip, leaving no time for anything to be really focused on. It is a headlong rush towards each event, each moment, and in being so there’s no time to piece together what’s happening exactly.

This is made worse by what seems to be a complete lack of editing which shows very often. One of the most glaring errors is, for example, using “mussel” rather than “muscle” over and over again. But more it is the lack of direction, the feeling that each scene was put into the story “just because” and so there’s no cohesive plot through the work. It’s a mis-mash of various things from action-adventure to horror to scifi to religion and so on. There’s no real core plot that can be discerned and it feels like the author didn’t have one and made scenes up because they seemed to be exciting and not much more.

The characters themselves are, as a whole, mostly stereotypical, not having any real personality to them overall. There’s many obvious evil characters, there are a vast number of “throwaway” ones as well. There’s no time spent on developing the characters and when things change, they do for no real understandable point.

The main character of the work, Trina, is for the most part a mystery and there’s really no time spent in telling her story well. She’s introduced, as are many others at the beginning, and then events unfold in the most odd and confusing ways possible. Eventually she is transformed into a succubus and her name changes to Draonai.

Draonai’s transformation is different, but the writing didn’t manage to really define her well. She’s a succubus, she suddenly is well aware of this in the split second after her transformation, which just is confusing. What I did like was how she continued to adapt to her new found abilities, dealing with her mistakes and all along the way.

But then the story takes her in directions that, again, make no sense overall. Possibly the most bizarre moment being when she appears, red skin, tail, wings, horns and all… and no one bats an eyes about it. What she does after that moment just was the oddest thing to read, and made me wonder what was the point in the first place.

There’s really no erotica to speak of, there’s a lack of direction to the work overall. Somewhere among the mistakes, the poor grammar, the odd scenes that stack on top of each other, there’s a story here, but it just doesn’t come out.

The author needs to redo this entire work. There needs to be pauses in the action, there needs to be some sort of singular tone overall. A lot of unneeded scenes that add nothing to the plot have to be removed. More time needs to be taken in actually telling a story and not pushing bits and pieces of one together.

Half a pitchfork out of five.

Almost completely unreadable, the work needs a rewrite, several editing passes and the author to focus most of all. A story without pause is a chore to read, and one in which almost every page has some kind of editing error makes it even harder.

At the time of this review, no further works in the series have appeared. I think there’s a story in this work somewhere, it’s just that the author needs to find it. Perhaps they can, perhaps they’ll revisit this work and make it better first before they move onto the next work in the series, if it ever appears.


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