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The Embrace Of The Succubus (eBook)
|The Embrace Of The Succubus|
The Embrace Of The Succubus eBook Cover,
written by H. Matt Synnot
|Author(s)||H. Matt Synnot|
|Publisher||Amazon Digital Services|
|Publication date||June 9, 2017|
The Embrace Of The Succubus is an eBook written by H. Matt Synnot. In this work the character Mistress Alicia is a Succubus.
- Title: The Embrace Of The Succubus
- Author: H. Matt Synnot
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 160 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B071GFJ7K6
- Publishing Date: June 9, 2017
Nineteen year old Jeff gets drunk after a party and his car damages some property. When a sultry woman comes out to see the damage and takes Jeff in his talk with her isn't exactly what he thought it would be, especially after she spanked him for his misbehavior.
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on June 13, 2017
Jeff makes a mistake and in doing so finds himself in the presence of Mistress Alicia. He comes to find that he needs her, desires her and wishes to be part of her world. But the Mistress has her secrets and when they come into the light, Jeff must choose from the needs of the heart, the desires of the flesh and the crying out of his soul.
The work is a somewhat complicated story of dominance and in being so tells of Jeff’s passage through his time with Alicia. His failures and successes are laid bare, his desires are plain to see and at the same time are held by Alicia as Jeff is drawn to her. That story kept me interested and I liked how things played out overall.
There are a few points at which I winced at what Alicia did, being that they were a bit too over the top or very close to being stereotypical in tone or action. Some of the moments weren’t really what I would call “correct” but they work within the story as things stand. Perhaps the one thing that didn’t quite work for me was how Alicia spoke, the tone of her voice. It didn’t “sound” right and that took me away from the story many times as I found myself thinking of better ways to say what she did, in a way that was closer to a “Mistress” tone. Her emotions are at times very wild, shifting from one to the next and back again. That was a shame because it only really served to make the dialogue and the story itself read odder and I stumbled often over tone and meaning as a result.
Alicia is said to be a succubus, and there’s some stereotypical aspects to her being so. Perhaps the ending itself is what bothered me the most in that, but for Alicia and her own needs, there wasn’t any way around this and when the moment came it wasn’t exactly a surprise. She’s interesting, but not delved into very deeply and that was a shame really.
The ending was the singularly most disappointing part of the work in that so much was revealed, so many answers given, but there’s no time to actually do something with them all. I feel like there needed to be another two chapters of exploration of the ending with everything that came out and it didn’t happen that way.
The work could use one more editing pass to make the dialogue better. Overall, the story reads oddly and I think that takes away from what otherwise is a very emotional and deep tale being told. In the same way, the ending is too rushed for my liking and while it makes sense in its own context, it could have been much better than it is.
Alicia is a mystery onto herself and the single most telling mystery is glossed over in the last chapter and it shouldn’t have been. Perhaps there needs to be something more written here to tie things up better, and if that happens I hope the author will go over the balance of the work and bring out more of the characters and give them all better voices.
Three out of five pitchforks.
There’s a very good story here about submitting to another, there is a story here about a succubus as well. It’s a shame that the writing didn’t have the emotional impact needed to make things better than they are.