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Her Sinful Mouth (eBook)
|Her Sinful Mouth|
Her Sinful Mouth eBook Cover,
written by Lucifer Morningstar & Danielle Voelkel
|Publisher||Amazon Digital Services|
|Publication date||May 7, 2016|
Her Sinful Mouth is an eBook written by Lucifer Morningstar and Danielle Voelkel. This collection includes the story Dahlia the Demon. In this work the character Dalia can be described as being a Succubus.
- Title: Her Sinful Mouth
- Authors: Lucifer Morningstar & Danielle Voelkel
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 61 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B01FBKDT1K
- Publishing Date: May 7, 2016
Dahlia and her brother Kai, both demons, are sent to an unsuspecting small town by the Council to perform a Corruption, but things go bad when Dahlia meets Jarlen, a human, and starts having emotions that demons by law are forbidden to have. When their father comes to inspect their work as Head of the Demon Council he has to decide whether or not Dahlia's crime deserves exile which to a demon is the same as a death sentence. Lovers from three different worlds find themselves changing the future of Heaven, Hell and Earth in this thrilling story where destiny is rewritten through the power of love. And what happens when she meets William, the angel that has been watching over her for centuries without her knowledge? Will he let her know she's been his consuming passion for as long as he can remember?
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on January 6, 2016
Dahlia isn’t like anyone she knows, mortal, angel or demon. There’s something different about her, something odd that has always been nagging at her thoughts. When the truth comes out, she needs to make a choice with no seeming good end. Not all choices are obvious and in making a choice, she might find the impossible made real.
This is a work of romance with a dash of adventure and some mystery, the largest mystery being Dahlia herself. While the focus is on her, there are quite a few minor and major characters that pop in and out of the story that have a hand in pushing, or driving, Dahlia towards her so called destiny.
The work reads a bit scattered, mainly from the shifts in setting and events that happen. Dahlia is thrown from one event to the next, seeming without end, and without much in the way of understanding or time to digest what’s going on. Even when Dahlia has to make a choice, there’s really not much in the way of explanation. She tends to act and the events that come from doing so end up causing her no end of problems.
At one point, Dahlia appears to be using the powers of a succubus on a mortal woman, but whether she is a succubus, or just a demon alone, is a bit shadowed. As the story progresses towards a confrontation and the aftermath, Dahlia changes physically, but not otherwise. There’s a lack of character development overall, really being limited to a few choice moments in the work, but not as an overall transformation of her character.
While this is a romance, there’s not really a lot of heat in the storytelling. There’s more passion in the battle for Dahlia’s life, in her needing to overcome. That in itself is interesting, and it tells a good story. Where the issue comes is the speed at which the story rushes from one moment to the next, from one conflict to another and so on. Something’s missing in the storytelling and that feels like the lack of some kind of control as to the telling of the story. Time to reflect before continuing onwards. A pause in the action to gather the plots helps in understanding. Sometimes that’s missing here.
Three and a half out of five pitchforks.
Much of the story is well told, but there are points at which the story becomes a bit sidetracked and lost. Some more focus, a little more time spent in the telling rather than the reacting, would have been nice. More time spent on Dahlia’s world, other than Earth would have make for what comes towards the end of the story make more sense.