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Hellhounds: The First of Many (eBook)
|Hellhounds: The First of Many|
Hellhounds: The First of Many eBook Cover,
written by Osgood
|Publisher||Alexander Michael Osgood|
|Publication date||August 29, 2016|
Hellhounds: The First of Many is an eBook written by Osgood. In this work several minor characters are transformed into being Succubi.
- Title: Hellhounds: The First of Many
- Author: Osgood
- Published By: Alexander Michael Osgood
- Length: 5 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B01L9XKZS8
- Publishing Date: August 29, 2016
The first demon from Hell arrives on earth. He has one mission, kickstart the apocalypse.
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on March 5, 2017
A demon comes to Earth and creates havoc. What comes next is anyone’s guess.
After reading this work, I just really didn’t enjoy it for a lot of different reasons. The characters aren’t interesting, the story is flat, the erotica, if you can call it that, is more porn than anything else. There’s some mindless horror, a bit of a teenage slasher feel to the work. The work is very short, leaving very little time for anything near to being character development or telling a story before the porn comes into play.
The main character, who tells this story from his perspective, does a series of evil things, climaxing in the taking of several female characters and transforming them into what likely are succubi, if they are not called such exactly. As succubi, they aren’t at all interesting to me as it’s more of a corruption of these characters and turning them towards needing sex with the main character of the work.
The erotica didn’t interest me, the main character spoke almost entirely in monotone, save for when the porn scenes started and then were was some emotion there. If one was interested in a, sort of, “demon takes over and does things” plot, I suppose that this work starts to tell that story, but it really doesn’t get far in that.
Again, the length of the story precludes anything like plot, characters, or for that meaning much more of erotica than a lot of moaning and groaning. In short, this work just didn’t appeal to me, I didn’t find anything to like overall.
So how to make this better? First, the author needs to expand on the story. What they have here is, overall, an outline of a longer work and they would be better served to write that work and see where that takes them. Second, the characters need to be more fleshed out, to become more than “evil” as things are. There’s a hint of that, an idea which would have been good to build on, but didn’t happen. The work needs an editing pass, mainly for the monotone of the writing, the lack of heat in the erotica, and the need to, at some point, make something more of the story than it just being there to push the main character into having sex with a group of women.
That isn’t a story. It’s a thought, an idea. Further thought might make this something more than it is.
Zero pitchforks out of five.
There isn’t much of a story, it’s not a lot better than a flimsy porn movie outline mixed with a bit of horror. The work didn’t interest me, I couldn’t find my way into it, or care about any of the characters. Cardboard doesn’t make for good characters and being so short as to leave anything like a story developing to the side doesn’t leave a lot to like here.