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Demon Futa Does Vegas (eBook)
|Demon Futa Does Vegas|
Demon Futa Does Vegas eBook Cover,
written by Jocelyn Saragona
|Publisher||Amazon Digital Services|
|Publication date||March 13, 2016|
|Followed by||Demon Futa joins the Sorority|
Demon Futa Does Vegas is an eBook written by Jocelyn Saragona. It is the first work in the Demon Futa series by this author. In this work the character Vianne is a Succubus.
- Title: Demon Futa Does Vegas
- Author: Jocelyn Saragona
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 31 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B01CYL2VOU
- Publishing Date: March 13, 2016
Other Works in this Series on SuccuWiki
A Vegas comic-con attracts Vianne, a succubus futanari with an appetite for mortal sin. Her obedient thrall Morgan, once shy, has become an irresistible sex kitten herself. Vianne proudly watches her thrall seduce men, though she can’t satiate herself second hand action alone. She enjoys a reckless group tousle with a club girl and another futa. Later, Vianne helps Morgan seduce her long time crush, but it backfires. This man is the other futa’s territory. After accidentally enthralling him, Vianne must break off the spell or face a rival futa’s wrath.
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on September 20, 2016
Vianne and her thrall Morgan are in Vegas and having some fun. A chance encounter leads to a problem and in the end there’s only one solution to make everyone happy.
The work is mainly focused on the erotica with a bit of background and plot to hold things together. There’s not a lot of time spent learning about Vianne or Morgan or for that matter any of the main characters. There’s just enough characterization to give them form and not much else. Vianne is a futa succubus, there is another in the story as well. There’s a little moment of her wings appearing and some scattered moments of her true form leaking out here and there, but really the story is mainly about futa erotica overall.
There is a bit of succubus mind control as well, which I thought worked well. There’s a bit of a D/s theme from time to time also. Some of the scenes are a bit contrived, a little expected, and while so the heat in them is fairly good, but could have been much more than it was for one simple reason.
The work needs a lot of editing overall. There are many spelling mistakes, incorrect words being used, and overall the story reads oddly. The dialogue “reads” wrong. It very much sounds like, many times, emotionally devoid of anything. The idea of the story is interesting and I would have liked to know more about Vianne, her past, and how events were before this story started. There’s a “societal” aspect to some points in the story but that isn’t explored for the sake of getting to the erotica.
That then is the problem here, that the story was pushed aside for the erotic scenes. It’s a shame because Vianne and the other characters are interesting. I would have liked more story about them, their relationships and so on.
One and a half out of five pitchforks.
The work needs a serious editing for grammar, spelling, and comprehension. The characters are interesting, there’s a story to be told, but it’s not brought out as much as it could have been. Perhaps there will be a second work, but even so, the author needs to make this work better than it is. Tell the story please, the erotica will look after itself.