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The Incubus Journal: Chapter 5 (eBook)

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The Incubus Journal: Chapter 5
Have a Swell Day
The Incubus Journal: Chapter 5 eBook Cover, written by The Mad Hatter
The Incubus Journal: Chapter 5 eBook Cover,
written by The Mad Hatter
Author(s) The Mad Hatter
Series The Incubus Journal
Publisher Amazon Digital Services
Publication date September 16, 2016
Media type eBook
Length 10 Pages
ASIN B01LZTK3WI
Preceded by Incubus Journal Chapters 1-4: What Happens When You Become A Literal Sex Demon?
Followed by The Incubus Journal:
Chapter 6

For other uses of the word Incubus, see Incubus (disambiguation).


The Incubus Journal: Chapter 5, is an eBook written by The Mad Hatter. It is the fifth work in the Incubus Journal series by this author. In this work the character Chris Douglas is transformed into an Incubus.


Overview

  • Title: The Incubus Journal: Chapter 5
  • Author: The Mad Hatter
  • Published By: Amazon Digital Services
  • Length: 10 Pages
  • Format: eBook
  • ASIN: B01LZTK3WI
  • Publishing Date: September 16, 2016


Other Works in this Series on SuccuWiki


Plot Summary

After creating a Catgirl, what else can he do with his demonic powers? What changes can he do to himself? Maybe give the girls a swell day.


Book Review

The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on September 20, 2016


Chris becomes an incubus, uses his powers on various men and women, has sex with a succubus and then faces a demoness that wants to destroy him. Assuming of course all of the sex doesn’t get too much in his way that is.

There is a lot of issues with this work, and the series as a whole. There’s no editing to speak of, there’s no story to follow really. There’s an attempt at plot but it doesn’t go anywhere. The writing is odd, almost unreadable, the dialogue is uneven, and the actions of the main character at times, I found to be a problem.

The problem is that the series seems to be so focused on the erotica that when the real background about what is going on appears, when there is a story to be told, it really isn’t. It’s also a good idea to remember what your main character’s name is as well. Characters are not described much, save for what’s needed for the porn scenes, the transformations are written in a way that seems flat and, as well, there comes a lot of confusion as to what exactly is going on.

The story wanders aimlessly for the most part and when something does happen, there’s no focus and no direction. The main character’s voice seems to be dumbed down more and more as their transformation continues. A measure of justice is done in the aftermath, but it is confusing and unclear. There is the feeling that these are a series of moments vaguely tied together towards in trying to get back to the main story.

Spelling mistakes, grammar mistakes, and overall how the text reads just doesn’t work. There’s a hint as to what’s going on, but all of the characters are cardboard cutouts. The sad part is, from time to time, the author hints at little side stories which would have been really interesting, but only mentions them in passing before going back to the porn scenes.

There are, by my count, about ten ways for this story to have been told better, expanded, the characters made to be more. That it didn’t happen, that the author didn’t spend some time to edit this into something more than a hot mess is a shame. More so that they charged for this.

Half of a pitchfork out of five.

Erotica alone is not a story. Transformation alone is not a story. Calling someone a succubus, or incubus, is not a story. Connecting the dots is. But that didn’t happen. The author needs to edit this work into something more substantial, tell more of a story. This isn’t a story, it’s a short series of barely connected porn scenes wrapped around a charade of a main character.

It could be more, but it didn’t happen.


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