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The Incubus Journal: Chapter 1 (eBook)
|The Incubus Journal: Chapter 1|
The Incubus Journal: Chapter 1 eBook Cover,
written by The Mad Hatter
|Author(s)||The Mad Hatter|
|Series||The Incubus Journal|
|Publisher||Amazon Digital Services|
|Publication date||June 11, 2016|
The Incubus Journal:|
The Incubus Journal: Chapter 1, also subtitled The Demon Within, is an eBook written by The Mad Hatter. It is the first work in the Incubus Journal series by this author. In this work the character Chris Douglas is transformed into an Incubus.
- Title: The Incubus Journal: Chapter 1
- Author: The Mad Hatter
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 13 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B01GZ12TVK
- Publishing Date: June 11, 2016
Other Works in this Series on SuccuWiki
- The Incubus Journal: Chapter 2
- The Incubus Journal: Chapter 3
- The Incubus Journal: Chapter 4
- Incubus Journal Chapters 1-4: What Happens When You Become A Literal Sex Demon?
- The Incubus Journal: Chapter 5
- The Incubus Journal: Chapter 6
- Incubus Journal: Complete
Follow the story of a college age man who wakes up having a normal day, until he starts to develop strange abilities that allow him to affect those around him. He finds women who may not have even taken a second look at him now bending to his will as he shapes them into his dream woman. Though this is just the first day and his first changes. Both of himself and the first victim to fall to his new hunger.
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on June 17, 2016
Chris finds that he is changing, that he isn’t the same person he was a short time before. Given the ability to see into the wants and needs of those around him, he also finds he can shape them to his will. Absolute power corrupts and Chris is not immune to what is possible now.
There are quite a number of flaws with this work and most of that comes from the series needing a serious editing at the least, and possibly a compete rewrite. There are spelling mistakes on almost every page, some of the text comes very close to being unreadable at times. There’s a lack of character development overall, and when the main character “changes”, there’s not much made of that save that he goes off to find another woman to play with.
That results in what can really only be described as porn movie levels of erotica with little heat to speak of. Setting side that however, some of the body transformations are interesting, the shifting of personalities and realities I thought was a story within themselves. As much as that has some promise, the transformations really seem to only focus on making playthings for the most part which reads as being repetitive in a very short time.
If the author wants to tell this story well, they really need to go to the beginning, edit the books again, fix all of the mistakes and, to some extent, tell more story than there is. There is a hint of that story, that plot to be told, but as soon as Chris comes anywhere near a woman that all gets tossed to the side. It shouldn’t be.
The second work is slightly better in this, actually taking the time to set up an encounter and focus upon that. This leads into what is, to this point, a well written transformation, but it isn’t enough to overcome all of the flaws that appear throughout the work as a whole.
it really isn’t clear if Chris is an incubus, that question isn’t touched upon or questioned. If he is, then he isn’t what one might expect an incubus to be and that interests me. He could well be, there’s some glaring hint of it, but the story just hasn’t gotten to the point of telling that story. It is infatuated with the erotica over story and that doesn’t do much for me.
I’ll give the series so far one pitchfork out of five.
The series needs more editing, more character development, more story, and a lot less porn movie erotica. There is a story here, the transformational aspects are well done, the hints of mind control are quite nice. But the lack of care in telling the story, even to catch the most minor of spelling mistakes alone, just makes this nearly impossible to read.
The author should be able to do better. I’ll watch and see what happens and hope they do.