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Impaled by the Incubus: A Sexual Demon (eBook)
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A Sexual Demon
Impaled by the Incubus: A Sexual Demon eBook Cover, written by J. D. Braxton
|Author(s)||J. D. Braxton|
|Publisher||Amazon Digital Services|
|Publication date||October 10, 2016|
Impaled by the Incubus: A Sexual Demon is an eBook written by J. D. Braxton. In this work one of the characters is described as an Incubus Vampire Hybrid.
- Title: Impaled by the Incubus: A Sexual Demon
- Author: J. D. Braxton
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 20 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B01M59LPP0
- Publishing Date: October 10, 2016
Heidi McCormick wanted nothing more than just to be a normal happily married housewife. It was all put in jeopardy when an Incubus Vampire Hybrid takes possession of Heidi. Lucky for Heidi she comes from a family of powerful witches.
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on October 21, 2016
Heidi wishes for something more, out of her own sense of her life spiralling away from her. Answered by an incubus, who offers something she desires, her life transforms and she is called to him. But there are those that want the Heidi they love returned and that battle will come to pass for them all.
The thing about this work is that it reads, very much, like a summary of a larger story. That’s to say there’s not a lot of time spent in character development, little in the way of a cohesive plot. There’s no understanding about who the incubus character is, they aren’t even given a name. Actually, from the perspective of this being a story about having incubi appear, they really don’t do much for the majority of the story.
When they do appear, it is a fleeting moment that reads as being very disjointed and hard to follow at times. The erotica, such as it is, has little to no heat in it for me, the incubi themselves are barely characters overall. There’s more time spent in telling about what are minor characters in the story than there is for Heidi, or for that matter her husband and family. This is a shame because there should have been more time spent in telling about Heidi’s life, telling about those that live around her. The scattered explanation about the incubi leaves so much that could be told, but isn’t as well.
Then, beyond all of that, comes Heidi’s transformation. It happens so quickly, the moment passed with little bits of change that are skimmed over. These are important things, they could have happened over time, or there could have been more of a reality shift that what actually happened. The “new” Heidi was an opportunity which the author didn’t do anything with. I could see, and really it’s so very obvious, that Heidi’s new self could have been, and really should have been, a succubus. But that didn’t come. What did left a enthralled soul and not a character behind. It sucked, quite literally, the life out of the story and the possibly for something better to be told.
The chase after Heidi, which brings in additional characters, is a series of short little moments, disjointed and not really connected or telling about what happens other than in passing. That again is a missed opportunity for expanding on the story. The seduction isn’t, the moment is fleeting and when the climax comes it falls flat for how rote and insignificant it reads.
The work really needs to be expanded on. I could see ten moments that could have been pages upon pages of exposition, character development and more. But none of that was used and it needed to be. Summarizing erotic scenes doesn’t work. Skimming over events doesn’t help in understand the story. Most of all, the telling of redemption, of fighting for someone, can’t be revealed in two sentences and a footnote scene. This could have been so much more, I expected that, but it didn’t happen. That’s the real shame here.
One pitchfork out of five.
The opportunity to use Heidi’s transformation further in the work than what was is the single most disappointing point of all. There was a clear path to take, but the author didn’t touch it, or try to explore it. Instead the just used the new Heidi as a means to get to the next scene, to pull the other characters along. Passing over plot, character development, even story for what amounts to a series of moments of teasing doesn’t make for a good story.
Taking what amounts to an outline, expanding on it, making this the story that is needs to be, would be. That, most of all, would interest me just for the sake of Heidi being more than the sexy threat she became. A lot more.