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A Date with Lilith (eBook)
|A Date with Lilith|
A Date with Lilith eBook Cover,
written by J. D. Braxton
|Author(s)||J. D. Braxton|
|Publisher||Amazon Digital Services|
|Publication date||October 12, 2016|
A Date with Lilith is an eBook written by J. D. Braxton. In this work the character Lilith is a vampire demoness version of the Lilith mythos.
- Title: A Date with Lilith
- Author: J. D. Braxton
- Published By: Amazon Digital Services
- Length: 18 Pages
- Format: eBook
- ASIN: B01MEEK34Q
- Publishing Date: October 12, 2016
Most of us are familiar with the story of Adam and Eve as told in the Bible. But did you know that Adam had a first wife and her name is Lilith? Neither did Cameron until he by chance met the seductive vampire in a bar and asked her out on a date.
The following review was originally published by Tera on her Blog, A Succubi's Tale on March 31, 2017
Cameron encounters a woman of mystery that he cannot help himself but be drawn to. A small step at a time she reveals herself to him, a legend looking for what she desires most of all. Given the moment, his life and hers become entwined, and then the truth cannot hide any longer.
The Lilith of this work seems to be a vampire/demon hybrid who is the embodiment of the Lilith mythos. She’s seductive, powerful, there’s a hint of her powers from the first moment she appears. Overall, Lilith was interesting to me mainly for how she held herself through what can really only be described as hunting Cameron.
The problem is, sadly, the editing of this work leaves a lot to be desired. There are spelling mistakes, odd word choices, and the dialogue at times is very difficult to see being spoken aloud. Beyond that, the narrative is disjointed, uneven and trips over itself time and time again. There is some erotica, which really didn’t have a lot of heat, or heart, overall. The seduction scenes were the most captivating, but again, how the narrative is told takes a lot away from the story.
While Cameron is mostly fleshed out as a character, the same cannot be said about Lilith herself. Suggestions are made, there’s something like a summary at the end of the work which explains part of the why but not the how of things. A tease is told of Lilith’s situation, what she wants and why, but that is skimmed over so quickly that comprehending that is very difficult.
There is a story here, but being so short there’s no character development, there’s little in the way of plot. The heat is not really there, Lilith’s story is muted as well. Add into all of this the need for a lot of editing and it is just a shame. I wanted Lilith to be more, her first appearance in the story offers that, but then things fall apart and they shouldn’t have.
One and a half out of five pitchforks.
The work needs a serious editing to give it focus, to push some kind of meaning to the work other than the final sentence. Lilith can be mysterious, she can be a force of nature. But along the way, there needs to be a reason for why things happen other than a lot of handwaving and some idle suggestion of something else going on.
A continuation would help, at least to explain what’s going on and why. Here, overall, that didn’t happen.